One day you are walking along the deck of the ship when you hear a loud bang. You start to run as you see smoke coming from the far end of the ship. You run towards the room where your patients are waiting to receive treatment from the doctor. Just as you arrive at the door to their room you hear another loud bang and you…
Run as fast I can to my patients, yet now knowing that our beloved ship was basically under attack, by enemies. I escorted my patients in the life boats as fast as I could because it will be more upsetting to see that your paitinces get hurt when they are already. I rushed the nurses to go in the lifeboats as I rechecked the room for other patients. I looked back I ran fast as lighting because the exit was kinda no longer there. I tried to make it out, but a piece of heavy wood fell on me. Then I saw a light, so I grabbed it, I started to lose my sight as somebody grabbed me and sailed me and others to land, I woke up with the sun shining as bright as it could.
Kia Ora Mafi
ReplyDeleteAmazing work. Your writing was so good that I could Visualise everything. I like the bit when you wrote "I tried to make it out, but a piece of heavy wood fell on me" It was very very interesting. Have a amazing holiday :)
Kia ora Mafi,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Megan and I am part of the Summer Learning Journey team who have been commenting on your posts over the summer. It is amazing to see that you have been so busy this summer with some incredible posts. I am excited to be a part of your adventure.
This story is extremely well written Mafi, with yourself as a hero who nearly loses her life but is saved by an unidentified hero. This is the kind of story I would see in a movie. Well done! I agree with you that it would upsetting to see your patients lose their lives, as they are unable to save themselves. The patients would be dependent on your bravery to get them out alive.
I loved reading your story you definitely have a talent for writing, Mafi. I would love to see any more creative writing activities that you have put together. Do you have any that you could share with me?
I hope you have a wonderful day,
Megan :)
Thank You Jolie and Megan
ReplyDeleteHey Mafi
ReplyDeleteWhat an amazing story!! As I was reading I could imagine everything... How long did it take you to do this story??
Hey Vedel !
ReplyDeleteI don't have a clue Vedel, but I know it wasn't that long, I used my imaginations . Plus congrats on finishing. Great work, and thank you for commenting